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Post by Game on Jul 13, 2010 22:55:05 GMT -5
Go Time!
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Post by Shadow on Jul 16, 2010 2:16:37 GMT -5
[glow=red,2,300]STAND[/glow]
Sometimes I feel like I can't stand it no more
In this concrete jungle filled with anger and war
Watchin' us save other countries, while ignoring 'our' poor
Tell me what the hell do we 'really' stand for?
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Me?,...I stand 4 Peace and a sense of Salvation
And solution 2 all the problems of this Nation
Tearing down these walls of laws and degradation
Need I remind U,...'the world is God's creation'!
[glow=red,2,300]* * *[/glow]
There is only One God, and One World in 'this' life
We don't "own" anything so what gives us the right?...
As a man, I'm only here 4 a short period of time...
But before "my" times up, I 'must' elevate my mind...
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Then pass knowledge on 2 my sisters and brothers...
And hope that they too will pass it on 2 others
As Dr. King once said, we 'must' "Let Freedom Ring"!
If U don't 'stand' for 'something', U will 'fall' for 'anything'!
Peace
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Post by Game on Jul 16, 2010 10:52:31 GMT -5
Wow!
Good shit, put that down in the books.
I really felt the meaning in that verse.
It was aimed to americans but can be relative to any nationality or race.
I really felt this drop.
Good shit!
10/10
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Post by BuzzKill on Jul 16, 2010 10:55:07 GMT -5
Damn.......all I can say is...........damn....lol........that was like......perect
BRAVO!
10/10
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Post by TURTLE on Jul 16, 2010 15:21:33 GMT -5
Well this piece had too many multis and was just down right uneven. . .
Haha. Gotcha.
Man this piece was excellent, Very well written with major emotion.
Not to extreme but not to settle just right in the comfort zone.
10/10. Good shyt SHADOW!!!
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Post by Shadow on Jul 17, 2010 0:03:33 GMT -5
Thanx fellas!!! I'm humbled. Seriously.
BG, Buzz, Turtle,...I 'm at a lost 4 words.
I had hoped U guys would like my stuff but I never expected this kinda response.
I'm just glad 2 be welcomed as a part of this board.
Thanx again.
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Post by BuzzKill on Jul 17, 2010 0:09:37 GMT -5
Thanx fellas!!! I'm humbled. Seriously.
BG, Buzz, Turtle,...I 'm at a lost 4 words.
I had hoped U guys would like my stuff but I never expected this kinda response.
I'm just glad 2 be welcomed as a part of this board.
Thanx again.
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Post by TURTLE on Jul 17, 2010 0:17:35 GMT -5
Have you not received any praise on your writtens on any other sites
Your pretty good at what you do man dont let anyone tell you wrong
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Post by KRiSR on Jul 17, 2010 6:47:43 GMT -5
Im probably not even qualified to be on this page..let alone vote on a Hot Drop like that!!!!
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Post by Shadow on Jul 17, 2010 21:04:19 GMT -5
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Thanx KRiSR man, again I appreciate all of U guys.
Its been awhile since I have been on a board like this, and the invite came right at a time when I needed an outlet 2 get my juices flowin' again.
I thank the entire NO HATERVILLE fam 4 the inspiration and extra boost.
U got a brother all hyped again 4 real.
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Post by qza on Jul 19, 2010 1:22:42 GMT -5
STAND
Sometimes I feel like I can't stand it no more
In this concrete jungle filled with anger and war
Watchin' us save other countries, while ignoring 'our' poor
Tell me what the hell do we 'really' stand for?
^^Nice ...crisp and simple.....yet powerful in the connection
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Me?,...I stand 4 Peace and a sense of Salvation
And solution 2 all the problems of this Nation
Tearing down these walls of laws and degradation
Need I remind U,...'the world is God's creation'!
^^Another crisp simple powerful connection.Sometimes we all need to recognize that power isnt always held in the most complicated vocab or abstract piece but in the heart of the one who wrote it.Nice.
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There is only One God, and One World in 'this' life
We don't "own" anything so what gives us the right?...
As a man, I'm only here 4 a short period of time...
But before "my" times up, I 'must' elevate my mind...
^^Truth!
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Then pass knowledge on 2 my sisters and brothers...
And hope that they too will pass it on 2 others
As Dr. King once said, we 'must' "Let Freedom Ring"!
If U don't 'stand' for 'something', U will 'fall' for 'anything'!
Couldnt have been said better.^^Really nice to see the boldness!
Peace
Good job Shadow
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Post by Kral Majales on Jul 19, 2010 3:35:52 GMT -5
Sick verse Shadow. I ain't from the US but I can understand everything you're saying. You don't make it too complex and it works. I'm normally against this sentiment but you pulled it off sincerely. I'm sure its not required for me to echo the comments made by everyone else but;
Well done bro. 9/10
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Post by Game on Jul 19, 2010 10:19:46 GMT -5
Krisr and Lyris still need to vote on this verse
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Post by djoutkast on Jul 19, 2010 23:40:14 GMT -5
deep my brother i didnt no u had that in u man
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Post by KRiSR on Jul 20, 2010 0:26:38 GMT -5
I thought i already did... but I gave you a nine shadow..... only because you gotta have room to rise still...... great verse
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Post by Shadow on Jul 20, 2010 9:59:05 GMT -5
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Yo' Q,...thanx for the breakdown and the feedback my dude
It was greatly appreciated
I tried 2 thank U in the CBox Sunday, but U had already dipped,
so I thought I would do it here
Kral, a.k.a stuck,...U 'know' I appreciate your comments man,
game recognize game, I'm a fan of your flow style.
Thanx 4 'really' understanding the core of this drop.
(I love 'all' races and cultures, and just wish that we were more united)
DJ Outkast,...U already know that I appreciate U my brother
Thats why I brought U in. I thought U might enjoy NO HATERVILLE as much as I do
U R a good dude with talent. Get Em'
Kris, what can I say that I haven't said over and over.
(saying it again never hurts though)
Thank U my brother from down under for 'your' honesty and inspiration.
(U know we still do our thing despite the time zone difference,...LOL)
Thanx again dawg
Peace
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Post by Game on Jul 20, 2010 11:37:29 GMT -5
All votes are in for this verse.
Total Score : 66
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